The Great Crystal

This is my Chapter Story, called The Great Crystal. Some Characters are like my friends and some are just strangers! This is what I have so far!! Enjoy reading!

The Great Crystal

In the deepest darkest forest, lays a stone from the spiritual moon in the sky. Has its crystal like beaming beauty, shines across the land..

Among a crowd lays a dark figure, a leathery black hood. And dark hair that falls to their chest, and then in another town sat against the walls, of a large kingdom door is another.. Except in a gown with tears streaming from their eyes.. That are held by their hands.. A staff leans against the wall, then.. In that same kingdom a knight with brown oak hair, instead a female her sword stuffed in an armored pocket, and her eyes seemed gentle.. She comforts the enchantress that had to be banished unless.. She found the wicked queen her gem!

The stone of the spiritual moon.. Was the most elegant gem in the land… but it was impossible to reach it.. With all the murderous thieves & beasts that hid in the shadows.. The queen was born and known to be the most spoilt and she stopped at nothing to retrieve the gem, so she could place it in the missing socket of her crown, that was made from a gold made by the deep underground miners. Another thing about the gem, was it needed a spell to be performed to open its shield of fortune.. And dispeer.. Even when the spell is made it takes focus & time.. The thieves normally mug you of your riches or valuables before tosing you into the streaming rushing water down below.. That is clossured in by 2 walls of ground and the roots that pearce you has you fall to your death.. In the depth of the water..

Her streaming tears, are uncovered the enchantress face was quite pale but you could see it was only a light skin color, that she couldn’t control. “ I’ll never find it! I’ll be banished without a trace! Where will I go?” the weeping woman cried, has she fell into the arms of the armored lady. “It’s all my fault! I’ll never be able to take foot in this kingdom again!” she screamed and whimpered like a puppy.. Crying furiously. “Enchantress!!” yelled the queen. The woman grabbed her staff and was led in through the doors by the knight. “Yes your Highness…” she spoke softly now, “Where is my Gem! I want my Gem!” The Queen had a small fit on the throne. “I haven’t received it my highness..” she muttered but her voice was clear enough.. “Ugh! You know what! I will banish you until you get me, my GEM!” She shouted smashing her fists on her throne.

What do you like about the story so far? Have you ever wondered what it would be like to be a character in the story? What else should I add on the way?