Hello Bloggers,
Today In Term 4, I have decided to do my Home Learning Blog post, on a Poem I have written.
The Poem is about a Enchanting Forest, I hope you enjoy it.
What did you think of the poem? What did you feel when reading this? What was your imagination caught on? Do you see this has a enchanting forest, with the description of the poem? Did you find anything I could fix about the poem or formatting?
If so let me know.
Thank you for Reading,
See you next time bloggers!
Hi Nikita,
ReplyDeleteI really like your blog post your writing is very describing it has amazing words inside of it. Keep The Great Job Up
:)Harmony
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Hello Harmony, I appreciate your kindness, and positivity in your comment, What do you think I should have mentioned after the poem? Did you read the questions? Is there more to the design I could have added? Thank you for your positive comment.
DeleteHi Nikita! It's Mia here from Rimu class, as you know.
ReplyDeleteWow, I didn't know you liked poem writing so much, just a tip, I'm not commenting on your blog because I'm your best-friend-forever, it's because your title was the only one that interested me :) I love your use of words and pauses in your poems.
I wrote a poem too, did you see it? Because I thought that we both did a very good job at writing poems :D. I thought this was a very good poem, it had a rhythm and has some rhyme to it. My imagination was caught on the last sentence, beautifully done!
To improve, I think that you should add descriptive language like similes, because it slipped out of your head.
Great work!
Mia
Kia Ora Mia,
DeleteI enjoyed reading your comment, and I love home much kindness you put into your comment, you always find a way to help the writer has a reader, and you show so much clear understanding.
I have seen your poem and I think that it got me memorizing space when I thought about what my poem was gonna be about, you always have such a interesting imagination and I thank you for that, and I enjoy hearing it from my 'Best-friend-forever.'
And your right I just had a slip of the memory when it came to doing similes I may of remember the clear rhythm too much, but I got confused at one part in your comment where you mentioned 'It had a rhythm and has some rhyme' after all thank you.
Keep up the commenting!
Nikita
Hello Nikita, it's me Parwin!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your blog post and also your drawing as well. I think that the poem over all was amazing and the amount of time that you have pout into it is awesome because everything is completed to a high standard and I really like the background as well.
While reading your poem, this reminded me of a story that I made on storybird a long time ago because it was like where this person was on a journey and they found something in the forest.
I think that to improve, you could keep the great work up because you did an awesome job!
Why did you decide to do this poem about a forest?
Looking forward to your next posts,
Parwin
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DeleteHey Parwin,
DeleteI appreciate your comment and I find that you have shown so much kind feedback, I enjoy reading comments like this, and I hope you do too, I would love to read about your story and get more knowledge off it.
Otherwise my reason behind this poem, is because during my time while I thought about what to write my poem about, I had a influence to do a forest, I thought of how much I love nature and I reminded myself of a video I watched which was like a clip of a movie about a forest.
Thank you so much, keep up the fantastic comments!
Nikita